the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in govt,industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of co operation ,not competition
Despite the modern world is a competitive world, there is also a huge need for co-operation in order to have success each & every sectors like ruling the country or doing good business for a company. In this consequence I partially agree with the statements as the best way for the society is use both the attributes of co –operation & competition rather than choosing one or making their youth leaders.
Co-operation is the thing people need when they want to make something big, because it’s always beneficial to have a physical or mental support to make anything. For example, If Jhon a young fellow want to start a new business or industry, he needs suggestion from the expert who know better than the Jhon as he is a complete begineer. Howover after starting that industry or work if jhon’s employees are young enough they should have a competitive mind so they can compete with each other as by doing that overall work progress of that industry can be increased.
Nonetheless, It should be kept on the mind that competition between two young people’s is okay ,in order to grow celerity to reach their vison. But it is not palatable ,for winning the competition they are not cohesive to each other. If they do so it will be counterturn to their self, because when they need of something which they have lacking , they will not find anyone whom can help them. So the motive of the competition should be increase one’s own efficiency not for winning the race.
In synopsis the youth should be more focused on broader success where their company & also them self both have a success in their field
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nonetheless, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 58.6224719101 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1343.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 280.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79642857143 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6785269359 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567857142857 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 704.065955056 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.8368999812 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.3 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234801962399 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101436700969 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581894309439 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138896161192 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726447323125 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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