The argument concentrates on improving one of the most important soft skill: leadership. It states that instilling a sense of cooperation will prepare leaders in a much better way than competition. However, the argument has it's own pros and cons.
Inculcating cooperation amongst young minds is quite essential who have impressionaable mind and pick up on things at much faster rate at younger age. Knowing how to cooperate with each other is what makes a successful leader. Consider team sports, where every player has a crucial role which contributes towards winning of the team. If any of the player does not perform, then everyone's performance is impacted. In my school, our basketball team was one of the best in whole region because of the understanding and coordination shared by us. Each and every member of team always bolstered other. Even if one person from our team had been indifferent, it would have led to everyone's downfall.
What defines a great leader is the way in which he or she makes whole team to cooperate with each other. Leader plays a very important role in maintaining harmony in between all the members. Leaders in government, industry and other fields usually have to meet a lot of people, and knowing how to cooperate with them is important to be successful. For example, a successful leader in government should be able to organize people in different departments. He has to cooperate efficiently with the people he leads. In business, copperation with employess must be ensured to have a successful corporation. This requires a strong sense of cooperation, so a society should prepare young people by instilling this quality in them.
On the other hand, we should also consider that competition is what makes people perform and outshine. Competition definitely brings out leadership qualities among them. Some have it naturally and some of them develop through different situations. I remember in my childhood, my father always encouraged a healthy competition by motivating me to perform better whether in sports, academics or any other co-curricular activity. This developed leadership qualities in a much better way. Through this only I realized there were leadership qualities instilled in me and I worked towards polishing them further.
We should recognize that both are important in our society. For example, although there exists fierce competition between different companies, they often have to cooperate with each other. A company may compete with another company in a kind of product, but they may have other areas in which they work together. A company providing searching service may be working together with a company providing safety software, such as sharing some algorithms or some data. However, they may have minor competition on advertising on another service. This illustrates that cooperation is also important in this society and we should instill in our youth a sense of both.
Therefore, a conclusion can be drawn that building a sense of cooperation is important for creating better leaders but a healthy competition should not be avoided. In fact, it should be encouraged. Only one can't be chosen as both play a crucial role in development of great leaders.
- Issue Topic #2: School should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood. 54
- Men and women, because of their inherent physical differences, are not equally suited for many tasks. 54
- the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competitio 50
- the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competitio 50
- the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competitio 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 207, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...fact, it should be encouraged. Only one cant be chosen as both play a crucial role i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, as to, for example, in fact, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2701.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16443594646 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95503460037 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485659655832 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 846.9 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6212169044 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.40625 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.34375 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78125 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191444581416 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467526659337 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650956493911 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995904718349 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058924656916 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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