Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
In the given issue, the author is of the opinion that young people should focus on achieving worthy goals instead of following their dreams. The author's reasoning for the claim is that most people's dreams are based on selfish interest. One may agree to author's reasoning at first glance however on careful scrutiny one may understand why his claim lacks credibility.
While worthy goals may appear to be more realistic and achievable, "following one's dreams" makes a person more resolute. Since the person is more determined, he works with diligence to achieve that goal. For instance, Dr. James R Doty a famous neurosurgeon and head of the neurology department of Stanford University had grown in the most perilous circumstances in Lancaster. His father was a dipsomaniac, his mother remained in a state of persistent depression, his brother belonged to the LGBT community and wasn't accepted by the society back then in the 1970s, his sister ran off with her lover at a tender age of twelve. His family didn't have any money to pay their monthly rent nor did they have the money to send their children to college. Yet, James managed to come out these conditions and become a successful person because he had a dream that one day he'll become a doctor. He followed his dreams no matter what the society or fate had in store for him.
On the other side, restricting oneself to achieve worthy goals not only hampers the progress but also dampens the will and effort that one might be ready to put in if he/ she were pursuing their dreams. This will waste one's energy and time and unnecessarily limit one's progress.
The author in support of his claim reasons that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. This is most likely to be true. But I disagree with the fact that people should not follow their dreams because it is in their selfish interest. Selfishness is the prima facie reason to make people resolute in achieving their dreams. It makes a person sincerer and diligent because it imbibes a feeling that he's the only one who can tread the path of his life. No one else can do it for him. And to change his destiny he will work harder than ever. Pursuing one's dreams brings out the best in anyone as the person is inclined to succeed at any cost.
To conclude, young people should definitely focus on following their dreams rather than trying to achieve elusive "worthy goals". The desire to fulfill one's dream makes a person resolute which in turn results in progress directly or indirectly.
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...ts in progress directly or indirectly.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246240601504 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.152255639098 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0695488721805 0.0880659088768 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0375939849624 0.0497285424764 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0657894736842 0.0444667217837 148% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0996240601504 0.12292977631 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0300751879699 0.0406280797675 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76730995314 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031954887218 0.030933414821 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00375939849624 0.0016655270985 226% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0808270676692 0.0997080785238 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0225563909774 0.0249443105267 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0093984962406 0.0148568991511 63% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2637.0 2732.02544248 97% => OK
No of words: 436.0 452.878318584 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04816513761 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.360091743119 0.366273622748 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247706422018 0.280924506359 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169724770642 0.200843997647 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.121559633028 0.132149295362 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76730995314 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 219.290929204 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534403669725 0.48968727796 109% => OK
Word variations: 61.9382413122 55.4138127331 112% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8181818182 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2879518292 59.4972553346 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.863636364 141.124799967 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.454545454545 0.674092028746 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 44.58882402 51.4728631049 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.47058823529 1.64882698954 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265234990025 0.391690518653 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106641733538 0.123202303941 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0836887630056 0.077325440228 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484919617579 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152001962466 0.149214159877 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107510313058 0.161403998019 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0883837553699 0.0892212321368 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.341839074838 0.385218514788 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0181852447481 0.0692045440612 26% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191584102077 0.275328986314 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580083671924 0.0653680567796 89% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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