Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Any major city of a nation is populated by people hustling day and night to earn money and make their ends meet. When the person cannot even sit with his family for a single meal, the habit of preaching god and following one’s cultural traditions doesn’t seem to persist. Due to this, it cannot be said that the cultural traditions are generated, let alone preserved in the nation’s major city. Therefore, I disagree that governments should provide financial support to major cities for the reason of cultural traditions being preserved and generated.
Any major city is populated with people from different forms of backgrounds. Each having their own history and heritage. In an ideal world, any person would like to sit and acknowledge the history of his religion, gain more insights into his cultural traditions and hope to reach them. But in a city, anyone is swayed from that opportunity due to the hackney of daily life. Whereas if we look at the other side of the spectrum, that is, in the rural areas of the country, people manage to live a much peaceful life, free from the hustle and bustle of the city and also engage in social interactions. Festivals that are celebrated in the city ensure a huge gathering of people and act as status symbol disregarding the true meaning behind the rituals. Whereas in villages, people perform rituals with a sense of meaning and motive. They perform the actions with a sense of peace and harmony towards their traditions which were established in their locales and till today preserved. For the above-mentioned reason, I think it’s very clear that Cultural traditions do not have the same essence and meaning in the major cities than the true devotion that they have outside the cities.
If we consider a nation as an entire body, a major city could be considered as its heart and soul. But every heart and soul need a backbone or a spine for optimal support. This support comes from the daily livestock, rations for the people living in the city. In India, about 75% of the food that comes in the major cities is cultivated in farmlands that are located in the fertile areas of the country. The farmers spend years of their lives making sure that crops that they produce and harvest reach the city dwellers. But instead of receiving help from the government, the farmers continue to remain in debt and are forced to either abandon the land and vacate or the farmer chooses to end his life in the pressure of not being able to provide for his family. The government should support the backbone of the nation as much or more than the major city because when this backbone is well supported, the major cities will automatically thrive and so will the nation.
Of course, some could argue that every major city is the main source of economy for the nation to thrive. But how will that source continue to thrive if the main backbone behind that source is not well supported? In conclusion, its best for the nation that the government does not support the nation for the reasons of cultural traditions being preserved and generated as those cultural traditions are likely to be followed for namesake. Instead, they can divide their sources into both the sides of the spectrum (rural as well as urban areas) for the betterment of the Nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 585, Rule ID: CONTINUE_TO_REMAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'remain'.
Suggestion: remain
...g help from the government, the farmers continue to remain in debt and are forced to either abando...
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Line 7, column 520, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...to both the sides of the spectrum rural as well as urban areas for the betterment of the N...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, well, whereas, as for, i think, in conclusion, of course, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2728.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 572.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45901163617 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463286713287 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.746182063 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334839386839 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949054741158 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071680659676 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217591499377 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343275090628 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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