Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today. Reason: We are not able to make connections between current events and past events until we have some distance from both.
Decision-making is from utmost importance in life of every single human being. To make a prudent decision, one needs to be aware of vicissitudes of current situation and avoid repeating prior mistakes. However, some people believe that knowing about the past has no effect on making current important decisions since making a connection between current events and past events is not possible unless time passes and a distance from both is created. Although making connections between current may require time, I disagree with the statement. The essential ability of human being is to make wise decisions at right time according to past experiences.
First and foremost, the main reason of reading historical books, passing history courses at school and listening to ancestral stories is about gaining experiences. Not only learning about past amuses us and can be considered as a hobby, but also this type of learning contributes to increasing our knowledge about various situations of life. For example, studying about Iranian history reveals that Iranian kings were puissant and sage but they lost their vast territory because of trivial mistakes of trusting miscreants. With this in mind, current officials may consider those past stories as paradigm and eschew repeating their mistakes.
Following that, making connection between events when the acting moment has elapsed is profligate. Knowing that the majority of decision-making situations require instant action and finding pragmatic solutions, one cannot waste time on hesitation. Therefore, managers and people who has high-level responsibilities should be well-prepared to examine weak points of current situations according to their experience and past people experiences. Then, they need to evaluate available solutions and select the most efficient and appropriate one.
On the contrary, when time passes people will understand the efficacy of their actions better since they can review the results and compare them with each other to see which solution ended up more practical. Additionally, looking at the past enables us to make connections between our recent decisions and past decisions. If there is any relation between our actions, we would notice them after the events are over. The only reason of this fact lies in that when dealing with an event we are obsessed with florid details of the event that distract us from focusing on finding suitable decision according to past experiences.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 632, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...se decisions at right time according to past experiences. First and foremost, the main reason ...
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Line 4, column 608, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
... finding suitable decision according to past experiences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, well, for example, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45287958115 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8171735708 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568062827225 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0859002722 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.529411765 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42730584389 0.243740707755 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131456727558 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119403710886 0.0758088955206 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24973116484 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124578393294 0.0667264976115 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.