Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The author claims the success of the governor, artists, or even science people is not the indicator of the nation as a great one. He further reasons that the sole proof is the comfort of the national. I generally disagree with this disposition and its adhesive clue. While I confirm the welfare is the benchmark of a great nation, the ignorance of successful achievements and based merely on the welfare of the people is a shallow and defective consideration.
First of all, the importance of the citizens’ welfares never should be overlooked. Since the initial and basic responsibility of each government is the preparation of the comfort zone for his national. Indeed, which leader is accountable of the supporting people who vote them, and convincing his opponents with his decent-level serves in the society. The representor of whether a president can response this basic requirement and responsibility is the level of the welfare of the people on that society. In a case that the public satisfies by the leader’s rearing and serves, the government will have the high-chance of becoming the president for the second period of presidency. I prefer to give an example from my country, the current president of our country gains the second period of presidency with the 22.5% higher vote from his previous election. His success and the increased number of votes is mostly for the sake of his efforts during his first four-year presidency in which provides better and cheaper health-care, high-level educational environment, and provides the plenty of work opportunity for the people.
However, the fulfillment of the basic needs of the people is not the ultimate desire of any human being. The man-kind possesses the endless perfection- seeking nature, which pushes him to go beyond his previously defined state of satisfaction. This seeking and tendency lead the achievement in various fields such as the art, science, politics, or sport. The crucial point which should be considered is these achievements are possible in the case that person is fulfilled by his basic needs. Consequently, the nation with a high range of the successful scientist, artists, or ruler, has the greatest background for flourishment of these triumphed people. According to the statistical value that is presented in the Top Tens Website, the United States is listed as the first successful nation. This numerical table illustrates the high level of easement in the country which ends via the effective and striking people in the different fields, such as Bill Gates in the technology, Mouhammad Ali in the field of sport, Elvis Presley at the area of music. Otherwise, how it is possible to have a successful person who has stress and pressure because of the deficiency of his initial demands?
Finally, the elimination of all factors and based only on the welfare of the citizens in the reason section is shaky logic. Since, at this reason, the writer separates the successful people from the public. However, they thrive from the same society. The underestimating this link, and consideration of the two irrelevant groups of the public from the successful individuals make this support statement frail reason.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned arguments illustrates my logic for not concurring with this assertation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 980, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, while, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2784.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1843575419 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99604007254 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502793296089 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 860.4 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9378566497 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170604853674 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480244689391 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520143929532 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976752343409 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082639916606 0.0667264976115 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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