Claim: When planning courses, educators should take into account the interests and suggestions of their students.
Reason: Students are more motivated to learn when they are interested in what they are studying.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Education is one of the most prominent building block of an individuals life.It not only shapes its character but influences what he wants to do, which career path he wants to follow. Hence, it comes as a great responsibility upon the the educators incharge of the curriculum to plan it in such a way that each child can get a chance to explore different fields. However, while planning courses the people incharge should plan it in a uniform way such that bits and pieces of every field of study is inlcluded rather than going by interest and suggestions of their students, so that the students get to learn about other fundmental concepts rather than suggest focusing on their interest.
I agree to that the fact that a child is more enthusiatic to study areas which interest him.However, this approach have two limitations.Firstly, an educational institution comprises of a number of students.If, the institution were to consider interest of every student and try to mold them into the course structure, it wouldn't be practically feasible and even if it is, would become cumbersume and difficult to handle.Secondly, Eduaction is all about opening students to new ideas.If students were to follow only according to their interest, then they would become rather narrow minded.Suppose, If a child is interested in sports and spends most of his time in the field, then he would be devoid of learning the basics of others subjects like maths and science which are essential in order to develop logical reasoning.
Also, Interests of children change over time .If they are interested in arts one day, they might start liking sports the other day. only by exposing them to different field, will they recognize where their true potential lies.Steve jobs, one of the pioneering personalities in the field of tech had passion for computer science but only by attending calligraphy class in college, did he recognize his creative side which help him in designing the font of the first apple computer.
In recapitulation, only by inculcating different fields and following a uniform path while planning the courses will benifit the children the most rather than going by their interests.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07777777778 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95488714246 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561111111111 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 23.0359550562 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 221.436497554 60.3974514979 367% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 261.142857143 118.986275619 219% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.4285714286 23.4991977007 219% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.2857142857 5.21951772744 235% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279600931265 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116674743068 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767554819961 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1527973073 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661766510784 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.2 14.1392134831 199% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 48.8420337079 40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 12.1743820225 191% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.2143820225 200% => OK
text_standard: 23.0 11.7820224719 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.