College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In my opinion students should pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs. I will support my point view by referring to mainly three arguments, the relation of performance and interest, individual freedom and job market uncertainty. Afterwards I will discuss some counterarguments and conclude to a recommendation for students.
First of all an individuals performance in a certain area highly depends on his personal interest and motivation. Curiosity increases intrinsic motivation, hence increases the ability to learn more about a subject and investing more time in total. Therefore by selecting courses based on personal interest the learning outcome is maximized. On an aggregate level such a behavioral rule might lead to an increased productivity over all areas, as students are more motivated in general. Second the decision on what career to pursuit, should not be determined by the financial outcome. Especially low income students that can barely afford tuition fees might have an incentive to focus on highly paid careers as they already accumulated debt. By determining the area of studying based on monetary incentives they somehow loose the right of determining their courses by themselves. Personal rights are quintessential for western democracies, hence students should be encouraged to use it. Furthermore future labor markets are uncertain. It is not possible to anticipate its future developments, so it is in particular not possible to anticipate which jobs are most likely to be the most lucrative. It might be a better strategy to stick to your own interests and strengths rather than gambling on uncertain labor markets. Moreover jobs do not particularly depend on the field of studying. There are lots of professionals, especially business people, that do not have a background in business administration or economics. Modern human resources departments so not only focus on students courses but also their personal fit, their experiences and other characteristics that indicate potential.
On the other hand every individual depends on a sufficient income, in particular those who have high debt due to student loans. By focusing on low income areas, that they are interested in, they risk low prosperity. Especially those who have multiple strength, might consider investing most of the time in the highest return strength.
Overall sticking to personal preferences is the best strategy to increase performance and personal freedom. However there is a significant amount of students with a high financial risk. Those need to find a solution between financial risk and personal development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...bject and investing more time in total. Therefore by selecting courses based on personal ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...tudents should be encouraged to use it. Furthermore future labor markets are uncertain. It ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...an gambling on uncertain labor markets. Moreover jobs do not particularly depend on the ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...rease performance and personal freedom. However there is a significant amount of studen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in general, in particular, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46024096386 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10917521744 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551807228916 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4635444821 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.5217391304 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0434782609 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82608695652 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217230004139 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576419859274 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827266709219 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124958508754 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0994990777196 0.0667264976115 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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