Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Schools play an important part in a child's life. Education and values imparted at the school decide a child's future. Although schools have been seen as learning temples, in current times these are increasingly becoming the reason for increased stress and anxiety in children. Due to an outdated curriculum and cutthroat competition children are bound to books and heavy bags. Schools are supposed to nurture children, help them develop imagination, and make them a better human. All these things are not possible by sitting in a classroom and mugging up textbooks. Although schools are necessary for any child's upbringing it is important to bring necessary changes in the curriculum to make the experience more wholesome and stressfree.
India has seen huge changes in education policy. Before the British moderated the education policy the education imparted in the country was based more on the practical training rather than the theoretical aspect of it. With the reforms of East India Company, formal schools were set up and a rigid examination system was put in place. This required students to resort to mugging up rather than actually learn the concept behind various things. Rabindranath Tagore's Shantiniketan was the fresh breeze the country needed to free children from the clutches of regressive education. These institutions provided students with necessary practical training to earn livelihoods and were the centers of excellence for art, cinema and music. A very little to no change has been bought in the working of schools and formal education until recent times. Increased anxiety and depression rates depict the clear picture of how the education system in the country in restraining children from pursuing what they actually want and forcing them to take up conventional professions.
In the recently concluded monsoon session of the Parliament in India, numerous changes have been proposed by the government. These have been welcomed by the student and parent community. The new policy allows the students to break away from conventional subjects and choose subjects that they wish to learn. Such changes are the need of the hour. Equal importance to sports and extra-curricular activities is necessary to help children get an overall experience. Formal conventional education has chained the students to books and benches, eschewing them from the experience of practical learning. Formal education does not provide them with the necessary knowledge required once they are out of school and college. Change is the only constant. It is necessary to bring about necessary and apropos changes.
Recent times have seen an increased number of homeschooled children. Parents prefer to teach their kids a complete and inclusive range of subjects which allows children to learn in a stress-free environment. Home schooling is a good alternative to formal education since it allows parents to keep a track of their children performance. Schools need to generate a more free atmosphere, where the prime concern is learning and not scoring the highest marks. Cut-throat competition is not the right kind of environment that kids should be allowed to experience at a young age. The focus should be on a more diverse and inclusive curriculum.
Schools have always been regarded as the temple of knowledge. It is necessary to maintain their stature, by bringing a constantly evolving curriculum. Care should be taken to make a stressfree and learnable environment to impart not only knowledge but also values. A curriculum that underscores practical learning is required. Students should be encouraged to participate in sports and extracurricular activities. This will engender more confident, skilled, and knowledgeable individuals.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... seen huge changes in education policy. Before the British moderated the education pol...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3172.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 585.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42222222222 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94128184141 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483760683761 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 972.9 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.840184993 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1111111111 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.21951772744 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.83258426966 331% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10276313031 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.023463922963 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288539103434 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0550990714509 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398097436138 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 100.480337079 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... seen huge changes in education policy. Before the British moderated the education pol...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3172.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 585.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42222222222 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94128184141 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483760683761 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 972.9 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.840184993 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1111111111 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.21951772744 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.83258426966 331% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10276313031 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.023463922963 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288539103434 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0550990714509 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398097436138 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 100.480337079 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.