Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education is one of the most important aspects of a person's life. Although it is true that getting an education is a privilege, the ones who do get the opportunity to get a proper, formal education should not be so flippant as to throw it away. Formal education shapes our minds. It helps us become erudite people. I disagree with the notion in question that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. I give three reasons for the same in the following paragraphs.
The first reason is that formal education has a fixed outline. There is preschool, then grades 1 through 12, then undergrad and, if necessary, postgrad. It is uniform; it is the same for everyone. We know empirically that many great minds were learned. Be it professors, scholars or authors. Whatever people decide to do in their lives, education forms a major part of it. Since there is uniformity, everyone can learn the basics. If, for instance, someone decides that school is too restrictive and they want to pursue other passions, then good for them. Education is not compulsory. But in most cases, when people have no idea what to do and are in a state of total consternation about what to do with their lives, this fixed outline of education system helps them. It guides them. If we say that in order to set the mind free, we should stop sending children to school, then chaos will ensue. Many of them will not know what to do.
The next point is about what exactly is being studied in an education system. There are the basics- english, mathematics, sciences and social sciences. Some may say that the syllabus consists of mostly rote learning and is not helping in shaping their minds. It is quite a valid point, but we also need to focus on the fact that repetition helps retention. Those long hours spent in learning math formulas may seem like a waste of time, but it actually isn't. If the person goes on to become a connoisseur of algorithmic sciences, they would have to agree that atleast some part of their early formal education was useful. The rote learning came through.
Furthermore, in regards to the mind and spirit being free, I would have to say that formal education is, in no form, a hindrance. There are so many philosophies in the world. The world has seen great thinkers like Aristotle, Socrates, Plato, Kant. Each would, atleast in part, agree that they were free spirits. They did not follow the guidelines set by the society. They followed their truth. It was because they were learned and scholarly. Even if some of them may not have taken up formal education like today's schools, they would have definitely studied various subjects that interest them. The point is, whether or not a person gets an education, they are free to think on their own. Education does not hold us back from thinking freely.
One may argue that fixed syllabi will hinder individualistic thinking. But it is important to understand that formal education gives a base on which ideas are molded. Thus, I reiterate my stance by stating that formal education does not restrain our minds or spirits rather than set them free.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... one of the most important aspects of a persons life. Although it is true that getting ...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'saith', 'says'.
Suggestion: saith; says
... sciences and social sciences. Some may say that the syllabus consists of mostly ro...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...m like a waste of time, but it actually isnt. If the person goes on to become a conn...
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Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...te learning came through. Furthermore, in regards to the mind and spirit being free, I would...
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Line 4, column 609, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...jects that interest them. The point is, whether or not a person gets an education, they are fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in most cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 549.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71948998179 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50689276438 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500910746812 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 20.2370786517 193% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6987983054 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.4358974359 118.986275619 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.0769230769 23.4991977007 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.87179487179 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.83258426966 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217235394295 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517139702076 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774804458135 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143634116691 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820714800267 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 14.1392134831 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 48.8420337079 152% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 12.1743820225 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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