Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Formal education has followed in different parts of world, most of the institutions and students are attached to the formal education, formal education includes exams which are divided into two categories short term and long term, formal education is restricted or limited with time, syllabus. It has the restrictions, not thinking out of the box, sticking to the syllabus, following the professors and institutions, no freedom of acknowledging different areas of technologies, no improvement in innovation and creativity.

for example, country like India follows formal education, students who study here, completely and blindly follows the education, education might be irrelevant of interest of students, includes many subjects in each semester, less focus on pragmatic skills, they have to mug up the subjects before exams if they don't understand, no freedom of asking or raising doubts ,showing innovative skills, where as united states, education institutions in united sates follows different approach of formal education ,they start from basics to innovative skills, limited number of subjects per semester, more empirical experience on subjects, students acquire great knowledge on the subject, they focus more on the interested areas, no exam nervous .

example two , great success people like Bill Gates, Satya Nadella, follows their own interest on subjects and studies them a lot, Bill Gates, as the student thrown of the college whose percentage is less , but still he has confidence on him.

Therefore, the formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free, this can be improved by changing the education pattern in institutions .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, therefore, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 256.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6015625 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89843867376 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6171875 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 23.0359550562 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 206.382751217 60.3974514979 342% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 286.8 118.986275619 241% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.2 23.4991977007 218% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269453759527 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186906503608 0.0831039109588 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.251368567241 0.0758088955206 332% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22393859777 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.26379878565 0.0667264976115 395% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.5 14.1392134831 216% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 48.8420337079 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 12.1743820225 200% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.09 12.1639044944 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.67 8.38706741573 127% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 22.5 11.8971910112 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.2143820225 200% => OK
text_standard: 23.0 11.7820224719 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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