Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within that group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots had not been wearing any protective clothing (helmets, knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material (clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads, etc.). Clearly, the statistics indicate that by investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident
The author claims that by investing in the high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severly injured in an accident. At first this statement seems plausible but after the meticulous analysis it becomes evident that it contains many flaws and in order to prove this statement true he have to cite the following evidences to make the argument more sound such as :
Firstly, the stastical record of hospitals regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment, at first it seems plausible but after the careful analysis it shows otherwise. As there are records of emergency going cases only but there are no records of cases which come due to the other type of injuries such as accidents or other injuries which takes place due to the negligence of the roller-skaters. Also there are other possibilities such as the stastiscal data, it is not mentioned on how many people it is taken. What if the population considered is too small? So, exact figures are required.
Secondly, 75% people were not wearing any protective equipment in the parking lots or in streets , but what if the raods were in poor condition there? what if the environment conditions were bad at that time? for instance it is hard to roll in rainy conditions as a result there will be accidents even with the proper protective equipment. So conditions of roads, weather conditions also play a greater part in the accidents. Also the population from which this 75% is taken is not mentioned, if the whole population is taken or not. What if it taken from small group of people and the whole population is not taken?
Last but not least author only culpates the faulty equipment for the accidents but ddidn't mentioned about the technical skills each person have, there is obvious possibility that less skilled the person is, more will be chances of accidents. Also there is no mentioning of the age groups. Younger and Older group people are more prone to the accidents than the adults. As a result there will be more injuries to kids or the older people.
So at the end i would like to say that the argument consists of myriad of fallacious statements and in order to validate this argument author has to answer a number of questions stated above. A reliable source is required from which the data shoul be collected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85990338164 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6863773973 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 106.684489252 60.3974514979 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.777777778 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242233607872 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563100509591 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686757488221 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110672004977 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875920672746 0.0667264976115 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.8971910112 240% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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