Today we can produce more thing, more quickly and often of better quality thanks to the advancement of technology. However, as technology advanced, we have more and more relied on machines to such an extent that we might have a great deal of trouble if anything ever happened to machines. In fact, the advancement of technologies was also serious problems in the past societies. People have always expected that the continuously advanced technologies and sciences would solve even the problems caused by those advancements. Immediate problems seemed to be solved, however, another problems have occurred newly: vicious cycle between technological advancement and its side-effects.
During the Industrial Revolution, automated machines were introduced into many factories. These machines were contributed to mass production in mankind, and consequently human could enjoy material abundance. However, automated production system also precipitated serious problems. It drastically replaced human workforce, and a number of the unemployed emerged. The Luddite Movement in the 19th century in the United Kingdom was the epitome of accidents in which a lot of workers presented their fears of losing their jobs. English workers began to destroy the machines of their factories, accusing the owners and their machines of displacing them and mired the majority of workers' lives into abject poverty. The capitalists and their government oppressed violently the movement. However, the depression of economy was not ameliorated, thus the working class has left in starvation for a long time.
Ransomware is more recent case of the side-effects of cutting-edge technologies. This is a kind of computer virus. Once a computer is infected by this virus, the computer stops working. The owner of the computer cannot operate any functions of computer. Then, he or she is demanded some money from the inventor of the virus for unlocking the computer and recovering the computer. This virus were invented in 2012, but the implication culminated in 2015. The notoriety of this virus threatening numerous personal users and even major companies and governmental agencies is due to the broadly established online network and the consequent interconnected personal computers. Thanks to this well-established infrastructures, the virus could infiltrate into computers even in case that the computers are off. While governments across the world and many IT companies quickly took actions, there were already enormous damages both to individuals and entities.
As evidenced by the above examples, the advancement of technology and science by which the rapid pace of life could be realized have caused serious problems in our history as well as in this day and age. Perhaps, we are excessively devoting ourselves to the grandiose plans at the expense of our precious present.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'machine'.
Suggestion: machine
...of trouble if anything ever happened to machines. In fact, the advancement of technologi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, then, thus, well, while, in fact, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51826484018 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05112450264 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570776255708 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8746666655 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.708333333 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0829102593503 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0201585762338 0.0831039109588 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319369528046 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0556286563696 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040189192984 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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