The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Today’s generation, with the help of technology and comfortable living, have been severely trapped into their comfort zone. This comfort zone has led them to rely upon facilities which make them weak. Although, all this luxury and convenient facilities have the sole purpose to make life easier and to focus on other important things in life - our dreams and ambitions and lead greater ideas. The following reasons will make you understand how this modern lifestyle provides support to people to become a strong and independent individual.
I agree that the use of facilities has impacted our generation to become languid and reliable towards those resources. This is because the pleasures that come with it have manipulated their brain to let the work be done without making their hands dirty. A strong desire to learn new things is necessary and to become independent is having this desire to learn to do things on our own. For example, if people have a cook in their home, then this facility won’t let you use your hands to cook food but someday may come when you will have to be prepared to do it on your own. Preparedness is a skill which this generation needs to learn and they will have to eventually. Thus, even though you have the luxury and comfortable living you will eventually be learning to do things when the time comes. The difference is that some people are prepared beforehand and some learn when the necessity arises.
The modern world has so much to offer and opportunities to learn and succeed which wasn’t available easily years before. It also provides the luxury which prevents us from doing mundane tasks and to focus ourselves onto the important things such as our goals and ambitions. For instance, with the help of Mobile devices and the incredible knowledge coming through the internet can develop new skills and study anything from anywhere across the globe. From learning to dance to programming anything is possible just at the convenience of your home and the hectic task of travelling can be avoided. If you are far away from home and you do not know how to cook pasta, you can simply search into your phone and make it. Learning makes you stronger and more independent which the luxury of this modern world provides.
Even though others would disagree saying that the luxury of this contemporary life has weakened our physical and mental ability to be firm and active. But I would say its upto us how to use it to our advantage. Hereby, I conclude that any resources are available to serve us and its upto us if we use it or misuse it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77455357143 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49985689146 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493303571429 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7995562101 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.95 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248122539138 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074173121491 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054046653103 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144548600613 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726928466673 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.