The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement mentions that luxury’s life can prevent individuals to be independent. But I do not agree with the prompt. People can grow up in a very rich families and still be strong and successful because it depends on a person characteristic not just money. The reasoning behind my position as well as a few supporting examples will be provided in brief, in the paragraphs below.
First of all, being rich does not mean that people cannot be strong enough in their lives. Imagine a girl who grows up in a rich family with all expensive clothes and shoes and she goes to a very expensive private school. It does not mean that she is not going to get good grades in school. It exactly can be an opposite because she can just focus on her grades and not be worry about money problem or having a job to pay for her school. She can even have much more high school knowledges compare to a student who goes to a public school because she can ask more questions from her teachers.
In addition, conveniences can make every body's life even better and faster. Consider a mother and wife who lives in a big and expensive house with a perfect kitchen and lots of kitchen staffs like different pans, meat chopper, and fruit mixer. Definitely, a woman can cook much easier and faster than a woman who has a very small kitchen with no extra help from modern kitchen instruments. Surely, a rich woman can even be a more successful mother and wife because she will have more time to spend with her children and husband instead of being in the kitchen for lone time.
On the contrary, some people may believe that very comfortable and expensive life can be a distraction for young people to get strong which can be true in some cases. For example, a girl child who always have everything she wanted may never think that life can be hard sometimes. She may even end up going to parties all times, spending so much money on her clothes, and wasting her time as she grows up. As a result, she may even does not finish her high-school and she may even does not care about having a good job in the future because she has as much as money she wants.
As someone grows up as a normal person with ordinary life, he/she may be more independent person compare to someone who has a very comfortable life. But it does not mean that rich people will not be successful in their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, well, for example, in addition, in brief, as a result, as well as, first of all, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43448275862 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38257203277 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445977011494 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0156479088 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.526315789 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8947368421 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0918680141208 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426375435113 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457412315657 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692210270896 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397505824202 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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