The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People can grow up in a very rich families and still be strong and successful because it depends on their characteristic to use conveniences in good ways. The reasoning behind my position as well as a few supporting examples will be provided in brief, in the paragraphs below.
First of all, having luxury lives does not mean that people cannot be successful in their lives. For instance, a rich student, who does not need to work to be able to pay for her school, can focus on her grades. This student still can become a doctor one day despite her rich family. On the other hand, a poor student might not have enough time to study because she has to work to be able to pay for her classes. As a result, this student might give up becoming a doctor.
In addition, conveniences can make every body's life even better and faster to become an independent person. Imagine a mother who has lots of contemporary kitchen instruments such as meat chopper and fruit mixer. This mother can cook much easier and faster than a woman who has no extra help from expensive kitchen devices. Surely, a rich woman can even be a more successful and independent mother because she will have more time to spend with her children instead of being in the kitchen for long time.
On the contrary, some people may believe that very comfortable and expensive life can be a distraction for young people to become strong which can be true in some cases. For instance, a girl who always has everything she wants may never think that life can be hard sometimes. She may even end up going to parties all times and wasting her time as she grows up. As a result, she may even does not finish her high-school. But, on the other hand, she can use her money in education path to become a perfect dentist one day.
As people grows up, they can choose their success either being rich or poor. With money convenience they can even reach their goals less hard, but it does mean that they cannot be strong people in a same time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cannot be strong people in a same time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, well, as to, for instance, in addition, in brief, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in some cases, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46978021978 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37894163475 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489010989011 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5414337466 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.3888888889 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94444444444 5.21951772744 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813207727177 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0301233331894 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032850018617 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545278641012 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198392597821 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 12.1639044944 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 100.480337079 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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