The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
I mostly agree with the statement that the conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into independent individuals. The luxuries have created dependance and lack of endurance. However, in some causes the conveniences of contemporary life facilitate independence.
Firstly, contemporary life has created a reliant population. A great example of this is technology. In the past, one would have to search up directions before leaving the house or have a map with them to navigate to a new area. Now, one can leave the house and turn on their GPS with ease. When it does not work however, it leaves the user stranded. The luxury of the GPS stymies the vigilance of people to seek out information before hand. In the same line, fewer people can recall phone numbers now. It is mostly due to the reliance on our phones, which serve as a lock box for important numbers. What would happen if our phone stops working? Would you be able to remember your friend’s number? I know I would not be able to. Technology, a convenience of contemporary life, has made people dependent.
Additionally, the conveniences contemporary life provide has decreased people’s endurance to difficult situations. For example, while taking an online exam the student fails to remember the answer to one specific question. As a result, they attempt to cheat, due to the easy access to answers on the internet. Rather than going through the grueling hours of studying, they resort to such means. Another example is when the electricity stops working.
However, the luxuries contemporary life has helped to facilitate independent thinking in some cases. For example, the Coursera provides free college level courses in different subjects for those who are interested. Those who wish to delve into other passions that are not taught to them can access them on the Internet. Additionally, luxury of technology has also allowed for a easier exchange of ideas across the globe, as in the past people resorted to emails or letters. Although the luxuries of technology can bolster independent thinking, it is dependent on how the person choose to utilize technology.
In summation, contemporary life has provided people conveniences that create dependance and and lack of endurance. However, depending on how it is used, in some causes the conveniences of contemporary life can be used to facilitate independence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: beforehand
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: and
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, while, for example, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20565552699 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99619220724 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521850899743 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8828823344 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.0 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4074074074 23.4991977007 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14814814815 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316267672436 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836541784477 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117305526888 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207257902863 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136775128967 0.0667264976115 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.8420337079 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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