Education, it comes under the basic need for everyone, and it should be the very first priority of everyone. Education is one of the most important thing that should observe equality for all, and there should be no discrimination of creed, color, and race. Todays' world is full of discrimination in every aspect of daily life, but there should be a dogma in every country to remove this so called diversity, and practise diversity in reality especially for education. Therefore I highly agrees with the statement- that- student of all nations should study same curriculum respective to their nation until they enter into their career degree.
To support the position taken, lets see an example of Pakistan. There are few people who completed their matriculation, so by this such a few ratio of school going people it is clear that there is a need to re-establish the education system in Pakistan. Pakistan observes three types of education system or boards; that are, matriculation, Cambridge Board, and American system. By this there is no standard education that everyone is seeking. There is no standard scale by which a student can be judge for his or her position in board. This is creating non uniformity in the nation. Lets see a real life example, the example of mine. When I entered into ninth class, my friends though that I am much superior than them, because I was doing O levels, and my friends were doing matriculation. However, this creats jelousy, hatered, and disdain among students.
Moreover, there are a lot of advantages of adopting a same nation curriculum. There would be less complexilities to judge a student intelluctual level. If a nation is focusing on one type of curriculum it would make the education system much smoother and invigorate. As an example, there are a lot of entry tests, that are needed for the entry into college; these type of tests are taken in order to judge students on standard scale. By same curriculum there would no need of the entery tests hence, giving advantage to the students. All type of people, rich or poor will easily seek education, because when there would be one type of system, it would be easy for the government to fund for the needy people.
In conclusion, there is a need to establish a uniform education system so that everone can seek basic need of life- the education.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 469, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ty in reality especially for education. Therefore I highly agrees with the statement- tha...
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Line 1, column 488, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'agree'
Suggestion: agree
...ially for education. Therefore I highly agrees with the statement- that- student of al...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun ratio seems to be countable; consider using: 'few ratios'.
Suggestion: few ratios
... their matriculation, so by this such a few ratio of school going people it is clear that...
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Line 3, column 584, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... creating non uniformity in the nation. Lets see a real life example, the example of...
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Line 3, column 710, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
... friends though that I am much superior than them, because I was doing O levels, and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85074626866 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7259141867 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8139324374 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225786093413 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698634447369 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111321491987 0.0758088955206 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123990206732 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113025716541 0.0667264976115 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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