Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state.
With more and more people seeing the negative consequences like global warming from pro-human developments such as urbanization and deforestation, there is a growing awareness of environmental protection almost on a global perspective. I think it is thus strategic to ride on the waves and pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas currently available in their natural state.
We live in a world with scientifc breakthroughs so often that we have learnt much more about this planet in the past 200 years post industrial revolution than what pre-industrial revolution civilisations have learnt through thousands of years. With robots, super computers and smartphones, it may seem like we are able to create accurate models to predict the natural world. In truth however, we are no where near as there are so many insidious links that we have yet to decern. For example, we can accurately measure the humidity, composition of all the gases in the atmosphere, predict wind patterns yet no one is able to create a global climate model to predict global warming, or even simply the impacts of clouds on global warming. The wilderness areas may seem insignificant to many people, but we cannot omit their importance in maintaining the balance in mother nature. If wildernesses are not preserved and eventually all cultivated, a shift in this balance may occur and there is no way currently to tell whats going to happen.
In addition, with more and more advocacies for the environment, it is logical to associate an increase in interest towards these wildernesses. Preservation of the wilderness for sight-seeing purposes can serve potentially as a source of income for the nation. Take New Zealand for example, a small nation in the Southern hemisphere well known for being “clean, green”, more than 4 million people visit this country’s famous wildernesses per year, almost topping the population of people living there. Not only can the earnings offset the costs to preserve the wilderness, it can also earn the nation a title as exemplified by the case of New Zealand.
Lastly, the wilderness may be habituated by many species of faun and flora which may have potential use to humans. This has been exemplified many times throughout history, with the most recent one being the discovery of Cyclosporine. Cyclosporine is a widely used immunosuppressant in the contemporary world, with a variety of uses not limited to treatment for rheumatoid arthritis, organ transplants or cancer treatment. This very drug was discovered through a mass expedition or quest some would say through wildernesses across the world insearch of the magic bullet. The drug was found produced by fungis only to grow in the mountains of Switzerland. If wilderness in the mountains had not been preserved, we may have never found this panacea.
In conclusion, as the world’s awareness of environmental preservation continues to increase, it seems logical for a nation to pass laws to preserve the wilderness. Preservering the wilderness can not only sustain the current harmonious balance in nature, but can also bring immense profits through tourism. It will also sustain the diversity of species of fauna and flora, which may in time benefit humankind. Therefore, I highly support the issue of wilderness preservation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2789.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 539.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17439703154 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03501797695 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532467532468 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 870.3 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8628691928 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.772727273 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216395019616 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677153610153 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117429863763 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135369369531 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946030973935 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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