People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Social behavior has always been a controversial topic among people. Some believe introducing laws play crucial role in the behavior of individuals, while others believe ones behave apart from the rules in the society and force could not play a role in their decision. I mostly agree with the former and I will explain my reasons.
First of all, the nature of the human race is greedy and likes to behave freely. Humans hate to be restricted by governments or rules and they prefer to do whatever they like. Besides, humans like to gain whatever they want in any matters that possible, if there were not any rules and consequences for their behavior. For instance, in the recent chaos in the Philippine, people broken the doors of the shops and robbed whatever they found. Thus, if people feel there is no any consequence for their behavior and they crime would not punished they do whatever they like and try to attain whatever they find.
Moreover, we are all restrained with some social rule, written or unwritten. In any society, people should act according some standards consider others in their behavior and if one refuse these rules, one would be rejected from that group and people avoid to have relation with that one. For instance, bahving politely in a group of friends are essential and acting rude with others would not accepted by the others. Thus, if ones want to be a member of this group should respect its rules unless the group would reject them. It shows the force that could affect on the bahavior of people is not only by government, but also people by rejecting unmanered people from the gruop could force people to bahve in especial manner.
On the other hand, some claim that although there are different laws in different country, there are some people that have always break the rules, the number of prisoners could be a sign of that. Or in dictatorship governments, introducing rules to control people would not be successful all of the time. For instance, there is a rule in Iran that women should not show their hair in the society, but sometimes some of them break these rules because they believe they are against their freedom.
In conclusion, I believe force by government or social groups play a crucial role in behavior of people but however, it would not work all of the time. There are always some people that believe these rules are not fair and refuse to obey them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 471, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ey found. Thus, if people feel there is no any consequence for their behavior and ...
^^
Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'punish'
Suggestion: punish
...their behavior and they crime would not punished they do whatever they like and try to a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid having'.
Suggestion: avoid having
... be rejected from that group and people avoid to have relation with that one. For instance, b...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'accept'
Suggestion: accept
...l and acting rude with others would not accepted by the others. Thus, if ones want to be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ect them. It shows the force that could affect on the bahavior of people is not only by g...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'broken'.
Suggestion: broken
... there are some people that have always break the rules, the number of prisoners coul...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 288, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... control people would not be successful all of the time. For instance, there is a rule in ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: BUT_NEVERTHELESS[1]
Message: Use simply 'but'.
Suggestion: but
...ay a crucial role in behavior of people but however, it would not work all of the time. The...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...f people but however, it would not work all of the time. There are always some people that...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72446555819 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36937980333 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444180522565 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0353865673 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115624887099 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431975488473 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294173996079 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722331361374 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191627201904 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 471, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ey found. Thus, if people feel there is no any consequence for their behavior and ...
^^
Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'punish'
Suggestion: punish
...their behavior and they crime would not punished they do whatever they like and try to a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid having'.
Suggestion: avoid having
... be rejected from that group and people avoid to have relation with that one. For instance, b...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'accept'
Suggestion: accept
...l and acting rude with others would not accepted by the others. Thus, if ones want to be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ect them. It shows the force that could affect on the bahavior of people is not only by g...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'broken'.
Suggestion: broken
... there are some people that have always break the rules, the number of prisoners coul...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 288, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... control people would not be successful all of the time. For instance, there is a rule in ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: BUT_NEVERTHELESS[1]
Message: Use simply 'but'.
Suggestion: but
...ay a crucial role in behavior of people but however, it would not work all of the time. The...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...f people but however, it would not work all of the time. There are always some people that...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72446555819 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36937980333 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444180522565 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0353865673 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115624887099 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431975488473 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294173996079 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722331361374 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191627201904 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.