People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
he question of Destiny vs Freewill, whether our actions are upto us or is everything predestined, is a debatable one. While some believe that our willpower allows us to keep fate at our own hands, others like the given prompt argue that our behaviour is determined by forces beyond our control. While it is true that to some extent, an individual's behaviour is affcted by some external forces, I believe that human beings are mostly capable of shaping their own behaviour.
During childhood, most of the behaviorial traits are developed by external factors that are beyond the child's control. From genetically inhereted characteristcics to those learned through observation of one's environment, children have scant control. Moreover, children"s brains arent fully developed to be able to distinguish right from the wrong. For example, if a child's parent is a chainsmoker, the child is likely to be curious about smoking and cannot exchange his/her parent or change the behaviour of his/her parent. Aditionally,since the child sees the parent smoking,he/she assumes it is not a normal activity, not a dangerous one and might try smoking when presented with the opportunity. Thus, during childhood, individuals have little to none control over their behaviour.
However, as children grow up to become adults, their brains are welldeveloped, and they are capable of thinking for themselves and thus, are able to chooe their own actions. For example, an adult who knows the consequences of smoking, and whoose uncle passed away from lung cancer, wont try smoking even if they see their own parents smoking. Instead, they might even try to persuade their parents to quit smoking. The amalgam of knowledge, experience and wishdom obtained over the years aids in obtaining the power to determine ones own behaviour.
Similarly, adults are also capable of changing their actions in the fture even if it isnt presently in the right direction. As several self help books mention, with determination and persistance, one can establish or change their habots within 21 days. Like how drops of water can create an ocean, even the tiniest change (1% change), can compoud to a huge difference over time and result in a better person.
Even though as children, there are several uncntrollable forces at play which influence our behaviour, as we row up, things become different withour wishdom, experience and level of self control. Therefore i believe that humans are capable of influencing their own behaviour.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24626865672 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9124296947 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554726368159 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0608442003 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.166666667 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102071582569 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339461900445 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228696019575 0.0758088955206 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0589499373436 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196553206534 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.