People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The topic raises the controversial issue of whether people's behaviour is greatly determined from outside forces which are out of their control or not. Indisutably, some things are out of control for people like the country in which they born, their culture, etc. Nevertheless, it's a person's will to control their life without being influenced from outside sources. Thus I generally disagree with the opinion that outside forces can largely influence people's nature and would argue that they can control their own destiny by making some hard decisions in their life without being strongly influenced by outside forces.
First of all, every human has a marvelous ability to think and make their own decisions, which none of the other species in the world has. Everyone can be able to manipulate the ideas and opinion which are given by outside people like from friends, from relatives, from teachers etc. A great scientist Dr. Stephen Hawkings, instead of having a drastic nurological disorder which incapitulates him for writing and speaking, he's able to contribute his work on science and has achieved a great success in their life only by taking good decisions and not being influenced from outside world. Thus, a person can control their outside forces and write their future.
Furthermore, most of the great people write their own will without being influenced by the society. For instance, the founder of Apple Computers, Stever Jobs, instead of born and brought up in a middle class family, has changed his will, worked hard, and become a billionare. Apart for these great people, many ordinary people are also challenging their will, achieved great success in their life. Hence, with some effort and posititve attitude, a person can redirect themselves towards success instead of going on with the outside forces.
Admittedly, no one has control of their birth, their parents, their religion, their contry, etc. and thus have a great impact of outside forces which are not in their control. However, after being born and brought up it's their own will, their own choice which they need to make, which are totally independent of outside forces. Some people are challanging those forces by making great choices in life while other people just continue to live their life as they're going. For example, a person born in a poor family, has been told to do struggle for money throughout their life while that of people who take birth in a rich family, doesn't need to bother much about making money. But considerably, it's possible that the person born in a poor family can become rich by making hard choices in his life. Indisputably, the person who born and brought up in a rich family can become poor due to any business loss. Thus, the above examples shows that at some extent, our life is largely determined by outside forces which are not in our control but one can make their own decisions to make their life better and achieve success in life.
Thus, In conclusion, although some situations are out of our control which determines us, most of the forces can be controlled by adage thinking and positive attitude towards life. As long as some measurements are performed, or some areas are involved, the behaviour of someone is largely depend on themselves not the outside forces.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...born, their culture, etc. Nevertheless, its a persons will to control their life wi...
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Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... being influenced from outside sources. Thus I generally disagree with the opinion t...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...pitulates him for writing and speaking, hes able to contribute his work on science ...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...owever, after being born and brought up its their own will, their own choice which ...
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Line 7, column 457, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ple just continue to live their life as theyre going. For example, a person born in a ...
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Line 7, column 631, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...people who take birth in a rich family, doesnt need to bother much about making money....
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Line 9, column 290, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...ed, the behaviour of someone is largely depend on themselves not the outside forces.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2745.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98185117967 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4674921469 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430127041742 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6922624713 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.772727273 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0454545455 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188141116272 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748541588125 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428985804541 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122987517362 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326780322217 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.