People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
We would like to believe we meticulously shape our behavior in accordance to who we wish to become in the not-so-distant future, unfortunately, our behavior is only partially under our control. As children, most of us were taught by our caregivers an idea of what is right and what is wrong - probably, we all learned that stealing is wrong and helping the needy is good. However, some of us, learned these lessons from life, or not at all.
The statement sheds light on an important topic that receives little attention: are we in control of our behavior? Looking back at the introduction, one could argue that these so-called “lessons” are obvious, and that we can learn these truths simply by experiencing life, however, not all humans think the same, and we all learn different lessons from the same interactions in life. Even though we all see the same colors, and hear the same sounds, two different individuals do not perceive similar experiences the same. Therefore, we learn different life-lessons from similar experiences.
Our behavior, and line-of-reason is formed from our experiences growing up, and continues to evolve as we develop from new experiences. Consider a child who grew up in a low-income neighbourhood, where crime is prevalent, with little to no attention from his caregivers: that child, probably became apathetic to crimes, and perhaps, even committed them himself - let us assume it was because he did not have money to eat. Of course that an officer of the law would hold his crimes against him, but is it a surprise that he committed them? Through this person’s entire life there was no-one to guide him, and his actions were quite simply, a product of his environment - he needed to eat, and that is the way he felt was the most efficient. That person, who is no longer a child, was never taught that becoming a criminal is not an acceptable way to sustain himself.
On the other side of the scale, consider a person who grew up in a wealthy neighbourhood, with nurture and love from his parents, he knew very well that committing a crime is an unacceptable way to deal with difficulties, regardless of what life throws at him. However, he was never taught to be economical, especially with money. Eventually, when his parents passed away, he inherited their fortune, and as a result, he spent all of it on lavish cars, and the likes. He was never taught to reserve his money, and the people he was surrounded by his entire life were not frugal either. Regardless of what most people would say, that person’s “faith” was already sealed -- he did not know any better.
Ultimately, we are a product of our environment, we are taught through life-lessons and guidance, if we are lucky. That is not to say we are drifting through life completely powerless, but we are all raised and learn from other people in life -- people who believe they teach us the important lessons of life, or maybe we learn through experiences, by interacting with other people. We all have an idea about what is wrong and what is right, however, we put emphasis to values in accordance of our experiences in life, and thus, our future is more often than not, predetermined.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 33.0505617978 242% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2673.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 549.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86885245902 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95339571242 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479052823315 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 6.24550561798 288% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 16.0 1.77640449438 901% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.125821096 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.65 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.45 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0550354144757 0.243740707755 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0218954932944 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0238316724189 0.0758088955206 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0348958528033 0.150359130593 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198684652875 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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