In the 21st century, numerous high technology products emerge every day. 3D printing, virtual reality, sound speed aircraft and so on, are all changing human's life. Is it true that the primary goal of technological advancement is to bring people more leisure time? Although under some circumstances, people participate more in recreational activities because technology saves their time, this claim unfairly generalizes technology's outcome. Therefore, I fundamentally disagree with the statement.
To begin with, many technological devices were invented with the aim of advancing human knowledge. Back in ancient Greek, Ptolemy stone was invented to measure the angle of the Sun compared to the Earth. Ancient astronomers used it to study the motion of our planet and proposed the earliest theories of Earth's rotation. As time went on, telescope was invented, which was only capable of magnifying images up to three times. Then different modifications were brought into reality, and in the end we have highly advanced telescope that enables us to watch the surface of the moon. The development of technological devices in history greatly overlaps with the advancement of our knowledge. We are inspired to seek better solutions and construct more efficient devices because of our insatiable crave for knowledge.
Nowadays, besides contributing to our knowledge directly, technology has also provided opportunities for us to achieve things that seem impossible, which is thrilling and greatly advances our life quality. Artists uses 3D printing mechines to make delicate sculptors which human hand has no way to achieve. Virtual reality expands our imagination and gives us enjoyment of sensation excitement. These are the ways that we widen our mind. They may help us advance our knowledge, or they may bring us more material for sparkles inspiration. No matter which, they bring excitement into our life.
One may argue that technology increases people's efficiency so that they have more time to entertain. It is true that people are rescued from tedious and repetitive labor so they have more free time. Every one of us uses stove and microwave so we don't need to generate fire out of wood. Also, washing machine takes care of our clothes so we don't have to wash them by hands. However, the goal of inventing these machines was never to encourage idleness, but to spend our time on more meaningful works.
Although it is true that one of the changes technology brings forth is leisure time, the primary goal of technology is to help us with the advancement of our knowledge and the excitement of our life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: don't
...e of us uses stove and microwave, so we dont need to generate fire out of wood. Also...
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Suggestion: don't
...achine takes care of our clothes, so we dont have to wash them by hands. However, th...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'changes'' or 'change's'?
Suggestion: changes'; change's
... Although it is true that one of the changes technology brings forth is leisure time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2351543943 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86706110528 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553444180523 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0481481053 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5416666667 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270867376701 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843959688678 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765286933897 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164122901905 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041622220086 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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