Throughout history mankind has diverse value systems and viewed different things as goals worthy of pursuing. Among these goals, some of them have helped the advancement of civilization and freedom, while others severely constrains the general welfare of human being. The criterion of whether a goal is worthy or not is entirely subjective, and a good blueprint in one's view may be a plan that leads to the destruction of mankind. Although a little leeway is allowed since the definition of justice is also unclear, I fundamentally disagree with the speaker's claim.
Each person's understanding of worthiness varies, and some people have very distorted and even antisocial view on what is good for them. Allowing these people to pursue their goals through whatever means would bring damaging effect to our society. Adolf Hitler clearly thought of his goal as the resurrection of German glory. However, he distortedly understood German glory as eliminating other mankind in the world and taking over the entire planet. To achieve his goal, he imhumanely executed whoever stood in his way and he set concentration camps to torture other ethnic groups such as Jews. His methods clearly were efficient -- millions of people died, and even the countries that he never visited worshiped him as a God. However, for anyone who has a little sense of morality, his crime is unforgivable.
Besides, even though some people aim good for the society, they may bring unwelcoming and irreversible effects into society because their lack of holistic viewpoint. Scientists who research in gene engineering should be cautious about the detrimental consequence they might bring to mankind. However, this year a Chinese scientist who has taken no bioethics class nor under any supervision has created gene edited babies. Being entirely ignorant about the sequelae on those babies and the effect on the entire human gene development, he held the belief that he can cure disease for those babies, and the benefits outweight the drawbacks. Admittedly, his aim was probably good when he started the experiment, but his failure to consider other consequences and his way of reaching the aim without consulting other people have caused irreversible outcomes.
However, we should always maintain a critical viewpoint towards our opinion, because history has also proven that people's judgement is under the limitation of time and environment. What seems unacceptable now may turn out to benefit mankind a lot one day. So we should not overly generalize and assert that any means to achieve self-determined worthy goals are bad. Bruno's science theory has been proven to be right but he was executed by his contemporaries; Socrates who advocated for critical thinking was sentenced to death for corruption of the youth.
Since what unjust means may be unclear and varies in time, we should allow some leeway for the speaker's claim. Otherwise, in my view encouraging individuals to pursue their goals through whatever means would have detrimental effect on society.
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 54
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 54
- “Laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places” 58
- Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities. 70
- "The concept of 'individual responsibility' is a necessary fiction. Although societies must hold individuals accountable for their own actions, people's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making." 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, while, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26543209877 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80584944929 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559670781893 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5229351027 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.318181818 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0909090909 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0694529281621 0.243740707755 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0232780484794 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0188186315562 0.0758088955206 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0445557504358 0.150359130593 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0106835041788 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 100.480337079 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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