Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Scandals, when they come out in public, represent a particular case that reflects immorality existing in a society as a whole. Unlike reformers and speakers who only point out certain problem that exist in society, scandals brings out a tangible evidence of that problem; this evidence sparks a sense of urgency (to act) in the society. There were several reformers and speakers in the past, for example, who had voiced against sexual violence. But, the movement only took the heat when salacious acts of Harvey Weinstein, a hollywood tycoon, came into pubic; this scandal was the instigator of “me-too” movement. This scandal-driven movement has become become a particularly beneficial for women: they share their experience with violence, which in turn became a major warning to the perpetrator of such acts. Had this scandal not been uncovered in public would women be able to get such plastfroms, that have become a major game chagner for violence against women? Obviosuly not.
Similarly, scandals also have a wider coverage than the works of any reformer or speaker, making it effective means to bring about changes. Though speaker or reformer donate much time and effort to bring reforms, their work (in most of the cases) doesn’t grab wide public attention until some major incident (scandal) representing the problem comes out in public. Corruption, for example has become a major problem in majority of low-income, developing countries, and many reformers and speakers have voiced against this crime. But, this anti-corruption movement takes heat only when some major political leaders are held guilty for carrying out these underhanded activities. In Pakistan, for example, anti-corruption movement was initiated recently after Sahid Abbas, former prime minister, was held guilty for corruption during his tenure. This has made a global news, and has become a strong warning against such acts to the leaders world wide.
In the same way, scandals involve people who are well-known to everyone, and even considered as an ideal of society. So, when people find their ideals involved in immoral acts, they easily get infuriated, and this drives public outrage. This feeling of outrage catalyzes people to move against that immoral act vehemently, rather than a lecture or speech given by any reformist or speaker.
Finally, though we can never undermine the contributions made by reformists and speaker to bring about changes in society, scandals, with its intensity, wide public coverage and energy, is more effective in instigating changes than reformists or speaker.
- The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. 66
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 66
- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve. 66
- Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. 66
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, similarly, so, well, for example, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39215686275 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80085187788 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561274509804 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.165537658 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1570749733 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05321336419 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045072989994 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921316381146 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323455122357 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.