Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The statement indicates that scandals have it positive effect of bringing problems to public attention where no other methods could ever have. Undeniably, people are usually too busy to focus on the realities, unless when something threatening like scandal pops up and becomes their conversation. Given that speeches from leaders and reformers are usually with low due credence and usually considered as bromide, it seems that nowadays, only scandalous news are able to catch public collective concern.
However, the media are facing revolutionized changes during these few years since the proliferation of new technologies such as the smartphone, on-line streaming video, social network. Now people are able to catch the news almost every time in every location through different news platform, and thus it’s harder for a single medium to approach mass audiences in a conventional way. For example, before the Internet became universal, people could only read the news through newspaper or TV channels. The media industry was not as competitive as it is today, and that is to say, on the other way around, the individual audience didn’t have too many choices but to receive whatever the TV channels broadcasts.
Today, the scenario changes rapidly that there are a lot of media start to focus on reporting scandals in order to catch enough audiences. As a result, the public is surrounded by harassing, shocking scandals from different news sources all the time. Over time, people are now getting tired of this news and would rather not to waste their time, so that scandals either become less powerful as they used to be, or they have to be much more shocking than usual.
In conclusion, scandals used to be a powerful tool not only for media to catch the mass population, but also help in bringing the important issue under the purview of the public. Nevertheless, the change in technologies lead to the revolution of the media industry and more types of new media diffuse the concentrate of the audience resulting in the less effectiveness of scandals.
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 50
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 60
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 66
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 66
- Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a conventional way" with adverb for "conventional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ingle medium to approach mass audiences in a conventional way. For example, before the Internet becam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14792899408 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77785285972 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568047337278 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7071421427 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 145.0 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.21951772744 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177500942822 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606384676662 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581136584473 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100994757628 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643193769286 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.