Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe
that competition discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.
The author’s claim has two conflicting views which are undeniably true. The athletic competition both drives and discourages the young athletes. However, there are several aspects of the competition which are to be considered in order to well differentiate the conflicting presentations.
The first view, that the competition drives the young athletes to give their best in the competition, usually the competition gives the feedback which is very important for the young athlete and their team to correct their mistakes or improve the performance of the young athlete. The ability to identify the mistakes made by the young athlete in the competition and learning from the mistakes drives the athlete. In the head-to-head competitions, the difference between the winner and any athlete plays an important role in improving the performance of the young athlete in his/her next game.
In the next view, there are several aspects of the organization of competition that are to be considered which has a direct impact on this view that is, the competition discourages the young athletes. for instance, in the competition where different kinds of young athletes including the experts and layman take part in, it would completely be a dominant show of the experts over the untalented athletes. such competitions discourage the athletes and can make them poses no more interest in the sport. These athletes would generally give up rather than taking the defeat as a challenge and getting more stronger for the next competition. The organizers of the competition should be in a position to identify or come up with metrics that have to be met by the young athletes in order to take part in the competition. This makes the untalented and inexperienced athletes practice enough to meet the metrics, which in turn make the competition to be the competition of experts and where every athlete is enough capable of achieving the competition.
In the end, the authors claim has several implications which are to be dealt and one can’t simply make a concrete statement until and unless these implications are considered.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: stronger
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 342.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21637426901 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02850021454 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3706783811 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.230769231 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336848286176 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144008296496 0.0831039109588 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104162755264 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188946646614 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123948688901 0.0667264976115 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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