Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe that competition discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.
In today’s world everybody wants to win.This win only attitude in inculcated from a very young age in the minds of individuals.This leads to a competitive enviournment in fields like sports, academics and almost every other field.
If this competition is healthy it encourages the performers to bring out their best.If a young athlete who is going to participate in a school sports event knows that if he/she wins a 100 meter race, he/she will be selected for state level sports competition, then this will inspire him/her to give his/her best.On the other hand if there is no stiff competition then there would be no reason for him/her to celebrate even if he/she wins the race.Consider a situation where a certain player is not performing well in a sports team and needs to be replaced by some other player.In this case if the spot in the team is highly competitive, then it would ensure that each candidate for the spot gives his/her best to ensure selection.Since, this competition forced the candidates to work hard, the candidate ultimately selected would most probably do well for the team.On the other hand if there was no competition for the spot, then there could have been a case of complacency on the part of the player filling up the spot, as he/she wouldn’t be driven by stiff competition to do his/her best.
At the same it I do believe that this stiff competition can discourage certain less talented people from participating in sports.For such people it is necessary to understand that participating in more important than winning.Not everyone who runs a marathon wins it.There is only one winner but still there are hundreds of people that participate in it.The first step is to participate and then one must give his/her best to try and win any competition.However the fear of losing should not prevent one from participating.
All in all I support the claim that competition brings out the best from the athletes.This competition is what makes victory taste sweeter.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, still, then, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 336.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95535714286 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06268221032 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 84.0 23.0359550562 365% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 372.503271798 60.3974514979 617% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 416.25 118.986275619 350% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 84.0 23.4991977007 357% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.25 5.21951772744 311% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282186177121 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157581520743 0.0831039109588 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486076699387 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157581520743 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486076699387 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.9 14.1392134831 310% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -5.32 48.8420337079 -11% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.92365168539 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 12.1743820225 287% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.67 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.58 8.38706741573 126% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 11.8971910112 256% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.6 11.2143820225 317% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.