Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
In today's world, wealth and power have tremendous influences on an individual's life. A man is defined by the wealth and power he possesses. But, not every individual in this world has the ability to have both of them on their side. He/ She needs the support from other influential individuals to bring out their skills and artwork they possess to the table. Similarly, the artists, writers and other people producing any type of artforms need the help and support of their government to make their piece of work come to the fore and get acknowledged. That is why, I feel that government funding is very important in ensuring that artists can flourish and reach newer heights in whatever they do.
Firstly, when an artist produces some artwork, he/she needs the backing and bolstering from the government that his hard work and perseverance towards the art will be acknowledged. If this is done properly, it boosts the confidence of the artist to a great extent and produces in him/her the zeal to work towards it arduously. For instance, consider the example of the famous Italian painter Adam Griffith. Earlier in his life when he was not that popular, he had a hard time in getting a good price for his paintings. Nobody, really truly acknowledged the sense and meaning behind his artworks and as a result of that he couldn't earn even a single penny through his paintings and had to live on streets of Rome during that time. But one day, when the president convoy was passing through the same street where he lived, the President came across some of his beautiful artforms. The President was in awe of his paintings and seeing his condition at that time, arranged a multifarious auction for his artforms. The auction was a big hit as all of his paintings were sold to billionaires and that day completely transformed him into a different individual that he is now. So, looking at his example we can clearly see that if an artist is backed up by proper government funding than it can have a huge impact on the artist's life.
However, I do feel that government funding is not the only way to ensure that an artwork can flourish. Yes, it is important and life changing but when people get the help from the government some times they can become too complacent and not work on their skill judiciously. So the role of the government becomes very critical here. The government must support any artist but they should never become a source of reliance . There is a popular saying that 'Talent needs opportunity'. So, the government must become that opportunity which the individual is looking for.
Therefore, to conclude, I would say that to bring the people who possess a skill into limelight must be the job of the government. To encourage the artist in bringing the best out of him must be the goal of the government and therefore must provide the individual with all the necessary help and assistance he/she requires. This will not only help the person but would help the people of entire country knowing that they have the backing of their government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, really, similarly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2526.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 533.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7392120075 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62029923896 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472795497186 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.646761734 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.25 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2083333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181618647789 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502305114201 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564822116635 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11300524015 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362564219887 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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