As the environmental problem becomes more and more serious, people all over the world are trying to find ways to solve this major problem and the solutions. But I don't think it's realistic or reasonable for the state to preserve all of the remaining wilderness.
However, requiring all countries to establish such laws ignores the practicality and potential consequences that will undermine its reasonableness. Firstly, even with strict protection of wild areas, the environment will not necessarily become better. There are many examples of natural disasters triggered by geological features of that place, which cause major environmental damage, such as natural forest fires. For example, the Greater Khingan Mountains fire in northeast China in recent years happened due to extremely dry weather in summer. Many wildfires polluted the air and destroyed forests. When dust from wildfires spread into the air, people and other animals could breathe in polluting particles in air. Not only did the natural forest fire lead to the death of suffocating wild animals, but also it pushed many more wildlife to leave their habitat. Therefore, protecting wilderness by establishing laws may do little to solving environmental problems.
What’s more, it is possible that protecting wilderness can actually hinder economic development. Some countries, for example, some desert countries, are in places that are inhospitable to human habitation. They must rely on wilderness development to maintain and promote economic development. After all, the primary task of every country is to safeguard the living standards of its people and its own strength. Therefore, there is almost no chance that these countries will pass such laws. Consider, for example, United Arab Emirates forbids any oil drilling plants established in its desert areas with huge oil resources. The country will lose immediately a huge amount of tax revenues from oil exploitation, therefore unable to invest in infrastructure development, provide citizens with medical, educational and housing benefits, and even import fresh water for domestic use. It is apparent from this example that some countries cannot survive without the use of natural resources in its natural environment.
True, some may argue that ensuring the execution of established laws is not costly. The cost in sustaining such an act could easily be spared from, for example, combatting corruption within governments. However, in less developed countries, tight governments’ budgets may have more to do with their comparatively lower economic level, instead of corruption in their governing systems. To those countries, seconds thoughts needs to given in sacrificing economic gains for environmental protection.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, after all, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62740384615 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99306455322 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608173076923 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0251132522 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.409090909 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222012504968 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560153929913 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032711622065 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124343597954 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254992475609 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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