Over the course of billions of years, various species of plants and animals have inhabited our planet. Life has been discovered in the unlikeliest of places - at the bottom of the oceans where there is no light, at the mouths of active volcanoes where temperatures rise to well over one thousand degrees and in the dry deserts where a drop of water can be the difference between life and death. Given the breadth of diversity in life on earth it might seem important to prioritize saving endangered species – especially at a great cost to human advancement. However, doing so is prohibitive and may cause more harm than good to the human civilization.
Saving a species requires a non-trivial amount of knowledge on the habitat requirements, feeding activities, mating rituals and a host of other things that may or may not be available. Developing an expertise in such matters requires an incredible amount of time and patience which will be costly. Just to cite one example, consider the case of tigers in the Indian subcontinent. Tigers are apex predators that patrol large areas in search of food, usually big game such as deer or water buffalo, water and shelter. In the late twentieth century the number of tigers living in India dwindled into the hundreds and the Indian government decided to invest resources into saving them by hiring experts from various countries that understood the behavior of tigers and purchasing large swathes of land from rural land owners. The effort posed an economic challenge for the government that was already battling mass poverty and disease epidemics. Had it not been for tiger conservation, the resources spent on it could have been used for education of the rural populace or development of medical facilities that could have helped alleviate some of the challenges faced by the country.
Further, the earth has been host to a large variety of life for millions of years and over these years, species that could not adapt to the changing environments perished. By some estimates as much as ninety nine percent of all animal and plant species found on the earth have become extinct. Every day, there are thousands of species that have been driven to extinction without human intervention of any kind. Even if every human intends to make it their life’s mission to save all the species they can from extinction, there may not be enough that can be done to save them.
Given the great cost required to save species and the futility of it, there is no need for society to expend resources that are needed elsewhere. As a species, we must first be able to take care of ourselves before we branch out into saving other species.
- "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies 34
- All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling 54
- There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the st 66
- Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance. 66
- "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1136, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...lities that could have helped alleviate some of the challenges faced by the country. Fur...
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: ninety-nine
... perished. By some estimates as much as ninety nine percent of all animal and plant species...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88596491228 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62039190841 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9998918684 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.058823529 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8235294118 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47058823529 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1258418162 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394399751117 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381280662346 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081164234678 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298428180317 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.