People in some countries do not wear traditional dresses Some people say that they would forget their history and tradition Do you agree or disagree

Sentence: In Viet Nam, for example, most female office worker are required to wear Ao dai, a traditional clothes, which is the custom handed down from generation to generation.
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Sentence: Participating in some physical activities or sports, an aesthetic have to wear sporting clothes for the dynamic and comfortability as well.
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Sentence: As a consequence, more and more people choose to wear western-style suits in stead of traditional clothes for the convinience as well as elegance of it.
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Sentence: Hence, it could attract more and more visitors and yeild greater income for the unique national sysmbol.
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Sentence: In some formal occations such as international meeting, where the people from different cultural backgrounds gather for serious issues, dressing to the nine is more widely used.
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Sentence: Hence, that possibly demonstrate the respectation, the key to mutual trust.
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Sentence: However, it should vary according to the curcumtance for the purposes of the conversation or the environment.
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One of the most conspicuous trend of the 21 century is the closer connections between countries, in both cultural and economic aspects. As a consequence, more and more people choose to wear western-style suits in stead instead of traditional clothes for the convinience convenience as well as elegance of it. Personally, i strongly believe that we should understand the importance of traditional costume to protect in protecting the national identity.

First of all, it is an indisputable fact that the national dresses remind people of numerous characteristics of their culture. It not only provokes the feeling of pride but also give the sense of ethnic identity of the local inhabitants though they are live in any places in the world. In Viet Nam, for example, most female office worker are required to wear Ao dai, a traditional clothes, which is the custom handed down from generation to generation. Hence, it could attract more and more visitors and yeild yield greater income for the unique national sysmbol. symbol. As culture is reflected in the way of life of the society, the role of cultural dresses are undeniable is irreplaceable.

However, although traditional costume are is of national importance, it might not suit in every circumstance. Participating in some physical activities or sports, an aesthetic athlete have to wear sporting clothes for the dynamic and comfortability as well. In some formal occations occasions such as international meeting, where the people from different cultural backgrounds gather gathering for serious issues, dressing to the nine dressing in uniform is more widely used accepted. Hence, that possibly demonstrate the respectation respect, the key to mutual trust understanding.

By way of conclusion, I firmly hold the opinion that we should preserver the characteristics of traditional costume by encouraging people to wear it in some special occasions or situations. However, it should vary according to the curcumtance circumstance for the purposes of the conversation or the environment.