Some people say that gun weapon must be legal for protecting their selves whereas other people reject it. Which one you agree or disagree and give the reasons.
Gun weapon seem like side coins that bring negative or positive effect. Some people prefer bring their own fire arms for safety. Although, others are tightened by people who bring gun weapon. I personally believe that both have some reasons. Whereas, some people reject this regulation because they think that only police who have regulation to use weapon. I am personally convinced that both of them have some reasons.
To begin with, people are allowed to own firearm such as in America and Australia. Moreover, having weapons mean that people having the right to protect themselves. Thus, by having weapon, people can use it in self defenses. As we remembered, we shock with a headline new when the guy who shooted in cinema after he suicide, this condition triggered some people to have their own weapon and protect their selves. Certainly, this defers criminals because all criminal will think twice before doing bad things while see other citizen bring weapon.
Nevertheless, some people ask government to make regulation that weapon in illegal. Furthermore the number of violent crimes increases when weapons are available. Besides, there is a risk of accidents with guns that triggered criminals. More is over, only police who allow using weapons related their job and responsibility. Perhaps, having gun will create violent societies with big murder rates. In other words, suicide rates have been shown to rise when guns are available.
From my point of views, I firmly believe that legal weapon may influence more negative effect even bring self defense. In my opinion, according to Harvard Medical Research, number of suicide has been increased three times in people who have their own weapons. Others, the percentage of crimes increase to the higher number because of the weapon’s own ship. The government must have straight regulation of weapons to their citizen.
To sum up, I do agree if citizen should not have their own weapons, whatever the reasons. After all, the government decides important rules to their citizen’s safety.
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Sentence: Gun weapon seem like side coins that bring negative or positive effect.
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while see other citizen bring weapon.
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Sentence: As we remembered, we shock with a headline new when the guy who shooted in cinema after he suicide, this condition triggered some people to have their own weapon and protect their selves.
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