The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, d

Given are the bar chart and the pie chart which illustrate the reasons of further education in adults and the public opinions about who should be responsible for each course.

Overall, the most two common reasons of education is adults are the interest in subject and to gain qualifications. Most people think that an individual should cover the cost by himself or employer should take the expenditure.

To begin with, according to the bar chart, interesting in subject and gaining qualifications are the most reasons for adults to pursue in further studies. The percentage of the interest in subject is high up to 40%, which is slightly higher than gaining qualifications figure by 2%. The third rank in this survey is the helpful concern for current job, which contribute to 22%. Moreover, the statistics of both enjoy learning/ studying and to improve prospect of promotion have identical number, with 20%.

In addition, people argue that an individual and employer should cover the costs of each course. 40 percent of public opinion assert that a person should be responsible for the cost of education. The employer proportion is also taken part up to 35%, whereas 25% is shared by the taxpayer.

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who should be responsible for each course.
who should be responsible for the cost of each course.

the most two common reasons of education is adults are the interest in subject and to gain qualifications.
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The percentage of the interest in subject is high up to 40%, which is slightly higher
Description: 'which' refers to what? percentage? or the interest? or subject?

The third rank in this survey is the helpful concern for current job, which contribute to 22%.
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Sentence: Given are the bar chart and the pie chart which illustrate the reasons of further education in adults and the public opinions about who should be responsible for each course.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a WH-pronoun, nominative
Suggestion: Refer to about and who

Sentence: The percentage of the interest in subject is high up to 40, which is slightly higher than gaining qualifications figure by 2.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to qualifications and figure

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 200 200
No. of Characters: 971 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.761 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 76 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.219 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4