The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by ymj02266 on Sun, 02/17/2019 - 09:40

The given bar chart provides the information about the proportion of Australian male and female in different age groups who did a regular activity in 2010.

In general term, female was dominant group in most of age groups except 15 to 24. And it is clear that there was not big different between men and women in 65 and over age group.

Looking at the graph in more details, the male group was beyond the female group at the first age group by almost 5 percent. However, it dramatically decreased until 35 to 44 which was 23 percent lower than female. after that period, the ratio of man gradually increased and at the end of age group which is 65 and over, there was just little bit of gap between two genders.

On the other hand, female age group maintained increasing or almost same rate with tiny drop until 55 to 64 after that, it showed a decline of 6 percent while kept its place of majority.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...which was 23 percent lower than female. after that period, the ratio of man gradually...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...up which is 65 and over, there was just little bit of gap between two genders. On the o...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, while, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 742.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44311377246 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30201946741 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62874251497 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 225.0 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4525550203 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 5.23603664747 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224462052274 0.215688989381 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119601559936 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117538292979 0.0843802449381 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168840571743 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128748093389 0.0819641961636 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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