The bar chart gives information about the proportion of Australians who do physical activities regularly in 2010, while the data is divided into different genders. Overall, the percentage of woman who did the regular body movements is higher than man, exclude the age group between 15 to 24-year old.
Looking at the data in more details, 52.8% of male between 15 to 24-year-old did more regular sports than female in 2010. However, the figure declined dramatically to 42.2% and 39.5% for the age group 24 to 34-year-old and 35 to 44-year-old respectively. After that, the figure increased slight...
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the age group between 15 to 24-year old. Looking at the data in more details, 52....
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...older, with 46.7% in the up-to-65 group. In contrast, the most active female was ...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun women is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
....3% in total of women population, while less women between 15 to 24-year-old tend to...
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Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'movement'?
Suggestion: movement
...24-year-old tend to have a regular body movements compared to male in same age. The perce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 825.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96987951807 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77428442778 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60843373494 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.5981308207 43.030603864 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.0 112.824112599 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 22.9334400587 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.23603664747 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302646072619 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155277997396 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108226945566 0.0843802449381 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225604439523 0.15604864568 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130260010616 0.0819641961636 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.2329268293 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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