The bar chart below shows the sales of jeans for two companies last year in Turkey

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The bar chart below shows the sales of jeans for two companies last year in Turkey.

The given bar graph depicts the turnover of jeans of the two survey enterprises namely Manga company and Jack & Jones company.
Overall, the quantity of sold jeans in the two corporations witnessed the same increased tendency. The sales of Jack & Jones’s commodity, nevertheless, are shown to be dominant during the selected period.
Initially, regarding to Mango company, there is a slight decrease in the number of sold jeans over the two first months. However, between March and August, the data of jeans contrarily increased, reaching 500 thousand pairs in August. In the next four months, this statistic remained unchanged, followed by a considerable rise to the highest point at 600 thousands of pairs in the final month.
Turning to the rest company, with the same movements, the turnover of jeans commenced at approximately 450 thousand pairs and dramatically decline by nearly 200 thousand pairs in February. In March, this figure had gone up gradually, and hold steady from June to August. During the last four months, the data significantly improved to 600 thousand pairs and peak at 900 thousand pairs in December.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nterprises namely Manga company and Jack Jones company Overall the quantity of s...
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...ame increased tendency The sales of Jack Joness commodity nevertheless are shown ...
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...nsiderable rise to the highest point at 600 thousands of pairs in the final month Turning to th...
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...d peak at 900 thousand pairs in December
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 921.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06043956044 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64050293812 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 182.0 22.4926829268 809% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 921.0 112.824112599 816% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 182.0 22.9334400587 794% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 47.0 5.23603664747 898% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160778527338 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160778527338 0.103423049105 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115499028346 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614993266542 0.0819641961636 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 93.4 13.2329268293 706% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -104.79 61.2550243902 -171% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 73.1 10.3012195122 710% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.25 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.74 8.06136585366 208% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 11.4329268293 499% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 74.8 10.9970731707 680% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 11.0658536585 515% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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