The bar chart illustrated about the percentage of males and females ages 18 20 have different leisure Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart illustrated about the percentage of males and females ages 18-20 have different leisure. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart give information about the rate of males and females have ages group 18-20 have different leisure.
Overall, it is clear that males playing football is higher but hockey is lowest. However, we can see if we look at the specific figure.
Look at the number of males and females playing different sports. It can be seen that the overall of number males playing football is highest among five activities and have number is 50%. Meanwhile, this number is lower in females and have the number of turn is 15%. Ranked second in terms of the highest percentage after football is cycling and both have number is 40% and 38%.
Look at the bar chart with three remaining activities. The rate of people playing basketball and swimming have the same number wi the males ( white) and females (black) is 32% but with females in basketball is lower 16%. Finally, with hockey is the activities have lowest figured among five activities with females 5% and males 10%. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.So, it can be seen that people have refer playing football and cycling than any other leisure.

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2022-12-22 Trần Ánh Vy 67 view
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 134, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'males'' or 'male's', 'malis's'?
Suggestion: males'; male's; malis's
...nd swimming have the same number wi the males white and females black is 32% but wit...
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Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...imming have the same number wi the males white and females black is 32% but with ...
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Line 4, column 256, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the lowest'.
Suggestion: have the lowest
... Finally, with hockey is the activities have lowest figured among five activities with fema...
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Line 4, column 437, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...es, and make comparisons where relevant.So, it can be seen that people have refer ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, look, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 966.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85427135678 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42354885463 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472361809045 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 292.5 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7708155912 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8181818182 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0909090909 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304834741086 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116871024384 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116170650514 0.0843802449381 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204177949867 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154836231925 0.0819641961636 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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