The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015

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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

The given bar chart gives information about the employment rates divided by sex in terms of 3 countries, in 2 years: 2005 and 2015.

We can see that the number of people working increased, with increasing significantly in the number of women. In all 3 countries and both years, the percentage of women who have jobs was smaller than the proportion of men working.

In 2005, the male employment rate in Canada, South Korea and Sweden stood at approximately 62%, 75% and 78% respectively. In Canada, the employment rate among women was 38%, while it was 45% in Sweden and only 30% in Korea, which is the lowest data in this table.

In 2015, almost figures increased except the male employment rate in Sweden. In Canada, over half of the women had a job, while it was 50% in Sweden and 35% in Korea. The percentage of men in employment in Canada rose by 8%, while it was 3% in Korea. In contrast, it decreased to 70% in Sweden.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ximately 62%, 75% and 78% respectively. In Canada, the employment rate among women...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ch is the lowest data in this table. In 2015, almost figures increased except t...
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Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ept the male employment rate in Sweden. In Canada, over half of the women had a j...
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Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t the male employment rate in Sweden. In Canada, over half of the women had a job...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 765.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52662721893 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62657916407 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585798816568 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3564723551 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253344698596 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103814460117 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731711386966 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156424051712 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487809198268 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ximately 62%, 75% and 78% respectively. In Canada, the employment rate among women...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ch is the lowest data in this table. In 2015, almost figures increased except t...
^^
Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ept the male employment rate in Sweden. In Canada, over half of the women had a j...
^^
Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t the male employment rate in Sweden. In Canada, over half of the women had a job...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 765.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52662721893 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62657916407 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585798816568 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3564723551 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253344698596 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103814460117 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731711386966 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156424051712 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487809198268 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.