The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart and line graph illustrate the number of atheletes with a comparision of their distinctive genders, who have taken part in the Olympics since it first established in 1924

Overall, the most highlight from each chart is the substantial rise in all the number of participants, as well as the amount of 2 genders who have entered the Olympics

Regarding the first bar chart, male participants have always outweigh the other. Besides, the amount of men also registered a significant increase with about 3000 more participants joined in from 1924 to 2012 . Although, the number of female parcipants have always witnessed with modest data, which just below 1500 atheletes from 1924 to 1984. This figure surged to nearly 5000 participants in 2012, which is approximately 5 times as much as it in the beginning year

Looking in the line graph, it can be easily observed that the number of atheletes participated in the Olympics have steadily grow in the 88-year period. In detail, the Olympics only welcomed around 3000 participants in 1924, nonetheless, this figure surged up to not fewer that 10000 people without any disruption.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, look, nonetheless, regarding, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 959.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10106382979 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84149152279 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.244492472 43.030603864 275% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 191.8 112.824112599 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6 22.9334400587 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.2 5.23603664747 290% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191793940673 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907273527835 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602442503077 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124301297369 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204929410878 0.0819641961636 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 13.2329268293 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 61.2550243902 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.3012195122 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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