The developments in Happy valley shopping center from 1982 to 2012 is represent by maps

Submitted by ana1999A on Thu, 04/09/2020 - 19:04

The maps illustrate how Happy Valley Shopping Center have developed over two different time periods (1982 and 2012).
Overall, there have been several changes, the most noticeable being extending the building with the addition of a furniture retail in the place where the lake was removed. Moreover, was opened up a parking lot and the coffee shop was demolished.
One change that stands out is that there has been a significant redevelopment over the whole period. The lake to the north-west of the shopping Center was demolished and redeveloped into a furniture retail. In 1982, the food store was located in the northern part of shopping store but in 2012 was constructed in the south-eastern part. The food store was replaced with the sports store and electronics store.
Another noticeable change is that the sports store and electronics store was replaced with themed restaurants, although the entertainment area, toilets and elevator are still there. Moreover the trees to the east of the store was cut down and, therefore the store was increased in size.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...t. The food store was replaced with the sports store and electronics store. Another n...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... Another noticeable change is that the sports store and electronics store was replace...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 182, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
..., toilets and elevator are still there. Moreover the trees to the east of the store was ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, still, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 174.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12643678161 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72796665806 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574712643678 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0958942298 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160527449325 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830110691479 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145505777993 0.0843802449381 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150307902131 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.190520349879 0.0819641961636 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...t. The food store was replaced with the sports store and electronics store. Another n...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... Another noticeable change is that the sports store and electronics store was replace...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 182, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
..., toilets and elevator are still there. Moreover the trees to the east of the store was ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, still, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 174.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12643678161 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72796665806 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574712643678 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0958942298 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160527449325 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830110691479 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145505777993 0.0843802449381 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150307902131 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.190520349879 0.0819641961636 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.