The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by ha meo on Thu, 04/25/2019 - 13:11

The given picture illustrates how to manufacture electricity by water.
The process contains 3 main typical steps with the traditional machines, beginning with evaporating water in the sea under the heat of sun’s ray and ending with providing electricity for everywhere from a small household to a big industry
The first step is how to bring water from the sea to the land. Firstly, in a natural way, the water is evaporated as the high temperature, which depends on the sun’s ray on heating the sea surface. After that, the flying steam to suitable height with the cold air it became a mass cloudy, bigger and heavier, blown to the continent and it rains. Next, we collect the water into a reservoir with a strong dam to repair the product.
The second step is the manufacture of electricity. it needs a circulation system, stating with water flow in a large duct to the turbine base on turning on the valve, if it turns off, the process can not certainly occur. Then, the turbine, which equipment can make the physical energy change to electrical energy or namely electricity. Finally, water has come back when the pump operates and gives it to the lake, and the process will continue.
The ending step is the transformation and distribution of electricity. Firstly, there is a problem in here, the electricity made is too small to use therefore it will be bigger by the transformer stationing which has a lot of complex machines being able to increase this power. Lastly, the electricity is divided in all around the country to do anything with a reasonable distribution. That means it plays an important role in daily life and does necessary of this process.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a natural way" with adverb for "natural"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ater from the sea to the land. Firstly, in a natural way, the water is evaporated as the high te...
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Line 4, column 51, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...step is the manufacture of electricity. it needs a circulation system, stating wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, so, then, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 965.302439024 144% => OK
No of words: 287.0 196.424390244 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84668989547 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8386201666 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 106.607317073 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 283.868780488 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6513493252 43.030603864 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121988838341 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435554304173 0.103423049105 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237875670612 0.0843802449381 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661768319843 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280875014406 0.0819641961636 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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