The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by miavu27 on Fri, 01/04/2019 - 22:50

The maps demonstrate how Queen Mary hospital changed after some developments during a 40-year period starting from 1960.

It can be seen from the maps that apart from the hospital which remained unchanged, the area was completely transformed after the constructions of several facilities to provide medical care and service for general public.

In 1960, the hospital was built near the main road and to the west to a shopping centre. People used the area behind the hospital to construct a car park for those going to the hospital and the section behind the shopping centre was kept for a farmland.

In the next 20 years, the farmland was replaced by a nursing school and the shopping mall was flattened, giving places to erect two additional buildings which were a cancer centre and a pharmacy. By the year 2000, the cancer area was extended and occupied the entire area of the nursing school so people divide the area for parking into two parts for a new small nursing school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...to provide medical care and service for general public. In 1960, the hospital was built ne...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...d and to the west to a shopping centre. people used the area behind the hospital to co...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 819.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84615384615 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48481259196 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573964497041 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.1171315085 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0992525935578 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061915052095 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485973358853 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734618772231 0.15604864568 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505520768264 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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