The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children s sports between 2008 and 2014 The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period

The line graph depicts the information about the spending on British children's sports activities by their parents from 2008 to 2014 and children were participated in the three different categories

Overall, every month British parents were spend the huge amount on their children's sports over the 6 year period. A lot of participants also took part in different games such as swimming, football and athletics. Football was considerably popular rather than another two games.

To begin with, At the beginning of the period parents were spend 20 pounds monthly on their children's games and this amount was gradually increased in the following next six years. in the last, approximately 30 pounds spend on children's sports by British parents

Moreover, in 2008 nearly 8 million participants took part in swimming and less than 1 million children play athletics. On the other hand, approximately 8 million children play football, which obtained the highest position among the other games in the first year. In the next three years, the number of football participants remained similar. Participation in swimming almost 4 million in the year 2014. After 2010, athletic participants nearby the 5 million.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1037.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48677248677 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83235375989 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.9468072894 43.030603864 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.222222222 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 3.83414634146 261% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302458010911 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108224512875 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110617814341 0.0843802449381 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122221897233 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990758850192 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 11.4140731707 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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