The first line graph shows the average monthly spending on children’s sports by their parents from 2008 to 2014 while the second one presents the amount of children participating in football, athletics and swimming in the UK at the same time.It is clear

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The first line graph shows the average monthly spending on children’s sports by their parents from 2008 to 2014 while the second one presents the amount of children participating in football, athletics and swimming in the UK at the same time.

It is clear from the first graph that the money which parents spent for their kids went up rapidly through every year. As the same pattern, there were more and more children joined in three kinds of sport especially the growth rate of young athletes was the fastest.

In 2008, British parents spent 20 pounds per month on their children’s activities. It climbed to 25 pounds per month in 2010 and kept going then reached approximate 28 pounds by 2012. Finally, it ended up with to the highest level about 33 pounds a month in 2014.

Graph 2 shows that the participation of children in football was around 7.6 million in 2008, which remained constant till 2010 with a slight increase in 2012 of around 8 million and remained constant till 2014. On the other hand, Athletics were lowest of around 1 million which remained similar in number in 2010 and eventually inclined to 5 million in 2012 with slight decline of around 4.8 million in 2014. Whereas, participants in swimming in 2008 was around 2.4 million which rose steadily to 2.5 and around 2.8 million in 2010 and 2012 respectively and reached the peak of 4 million in 2014.

The first line graph shows the average monthly spending on children’s sports by their parents from 2008 to 2014 while the second one presents the amount of children participating in football, athletics and swimming in the UK at the same time.

It is clear from the first graph that the money which parents spent for their kids went up rapidly through every year. As the same pattern, there were more and more children joined in three kinds of sport especially the growth rate of young athletes was the fastest.

In 2008, British parents spent 20 pounds per month on their children’s activities. It climbed to 25 pounds per month in 2010 and kept going then reached approximate 28 pounds by 2012. Finally, it ended up with to the highest level about 33 pounds a month in 2014.

Graph 2 shows that the participation of children in football was around 7.6 million in 2008, which remained constant till 2010 with a slight increase in 2012 of around 8 million and remained constant till 2014. On the other hand, Athletics were lowest of around 1 million which remained similar in number in 2010 and eventually inclined to 5 million in 2012 with slight decline of around 4.8 million in 2014. Whereas, participants in swimming in 2008 was around 2.4 million which rose steadily to 2.5 and around 2.8 million in 2010 and 2012 respectively and reached the peak of 4 million in 2014.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate of young athletes was the fastest.   In 2008, British parents spent 20 pounds...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, second, then, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 242.0 196.424390244 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78099173554 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56683425082 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52479338843 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2178303072 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.555555556 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8888888889 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418148589267 0.215688989381 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191910535069 0.103423049105 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.271423676328 0.0843802449381 322% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.340913784144 0.15604864568 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.348776397559 0.0819641961636 426% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.93 61.2550243902 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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