The first line graph shows the average monthly spending on children’s sports by their parents from 2008 to 2014 while the second one presents the amount of children participating in football, athletics and swimming in the UK at the same time.
It is clear from the first graph that the money which parents spent for their kids went up rapidly through every year. As the same pattern, there were more and more children joined in three kinds of sport especially the growth rate of young athletes was the fastest.
The rising line from the first figure started with the point 20 pounds a month by 2008. It climbed to 25 pounds per month in 2010 and kept going then reached approximate 28 by 2012. Finally, it ended up with a highest about 33 pounds a month in 2014.
According to the second diagram, the kids whom participated in football and swimming increased insignificantly. But the beginning and the ending point of football was three times as much as swimming’s in 2008 and 2014. With a little up and down, the number of kids learning athletics stood still between 2008 and 2010 then jumped a peak 5 millions by 2012. At last, it became the second sport which had large amount of children took part in.
The first line graph shows the average monthly spending on children’s sports by their parents from 2008 to 2014 while the second one presents the amount of children participating in football, athletics and swimming in the UK at the same time.
It is clear from the first graph that the money which parents spent for their kids went up rapidly through every year. As the same pattern, there were more and more children joined in three kinds of sport especially the growth rate of young athletes was the fastest.
The rising line from the first figure started with the point 20 pounds a month by 2008. It climbed to 25 pounds per month in 2010 and kept going then reached approximate 28 by 2012. Finally, it ended up with a highest about 33 pounds a month in 2014.
According to the second diagram, the kids whom participated in football and swimming increased insignificantly. But the beginning and the ending point of football was three times as much as swimming’s in 2008 and 2014. With a little up and down, the number of kids learning athletics stood still between 2008 and 2010 then jumped a peak 5 millions by 2012. At last, it became the second sport which had large amount of children took part in.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate of young athletes was the fastest. The rising line from the first figure st...
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Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...e 28 by 2012. Finally, it ended up with a highest about 33 pounds a month in 2014...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, still, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1015.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69907407407 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54233277381 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578703703704 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.597163781 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.23603664747 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.550726663979 0.215688989381 255% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18937868377 0.103423049105 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.255301791551 0.0843802449381 303% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.367546244434 0.15604864568 236% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.333856825609 0.0819641961636 407% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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