The given pie charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed employed or pursuing further education in 1980 1990 and 2000

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The given pie charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or pursuing further education, in 1980, 1990, and 2000.

The given pie charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or pursuing further education, in 1980, 1990, and 2000.

Overall, from 1980 to 2000, the proportion of Australian students who were employed grew, while there was a decline in both the proportion of those pursuing higher levels of education and those who were unemployed.

In 1980, half of the Australian secondary school leavers chose to continue their education. After a 10 year period, this number dropped to only 38% and remained almost unchanged in 2000. Meanwhile, the figures for those who were unemployment were the smallest, at only 10% in 1980, 12% in 1990, and finally dropping back down to 8% in 2000.

On the other hand, over the years Australia saw an increase in the percentage of students who received a job after graduation from secondary school, from 40% in 1980 to 55% in 2000, which was the largest figure among all examined categories.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...figure among all examined categories.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, second, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 821.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09937888199 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68417857622 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596273291925 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8619329737 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.59528400489 0.215688989381 276% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.31643762005 0.103423049105 306% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.318064956727 0.0843802449381 377% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.424284074861 0.15604864568 272% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.338826033489 0.0819641961636 413% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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