The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.

Essay topics:

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.

The bar chart illustrates data what Australian offspring do their spare activities, dividing by five categories.
In general, if we glance at bar graph which is given, the highest trend is watching TV or videos to boys and girls age from 5 to 14.
If we compare with boys and girls between five and fourteen, boys spent their time for leisure activities more rather than gives 5-14 in order to skateboarding or rollerblading, bike riding and playing electronic or computer games. However, in the field of art and craft girls (from five to fourteen) take the lead from boys.
Interestingly, for watching TV or videos both of them who girls and boys between five and fourteen are the same result such full of per cent (100%). The most of girls of 5-14 spend time free activities for watching TV or videos. In the contrast, the least of them lose their free time in order to skateboarding or rollerblading, with approximately quarter per cent (25%).

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the girls') or simply say ''most girls''.
Suggestion: most of the girls; most girls
... result such full of per cent 100%. The most of girls of 5-14 spend time free activities for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 782.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76829268293 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77960512305 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2045143125 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.714285714 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0723476073528 0.215688989381 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329070835845 0.103423049105 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331544160751 0.0843802449381 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.044577149815 0.15604864568 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191922671795 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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