The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The given line graph represents the percentage of grey hair people in three different nations during the period of 1940 to 2040

Overall, it can be observed from the line graph that the America was highest in older population in starting years of the graph, while at the last japan on a top from others.

To begin with, the America and sweden was on same proportion in first five decades there is minor difference between them. In 1940, nine percent old people in usa while it was two percent lowest in sweden as well as it continued with same difference in next two years it was 10% and 15% respectively. In 20th century the percentum of elder individuals in sweden inclined twenty percent, whereas usa on same position in this year.

Moving further, in 2040 sweden and usa will almost same ratio of old age people it will approximately 25 and 23 percent respectively. There are fluctuating trend of japan population it was five percent in starting year after that it continueslly decreased till 2000 ( 3%) but in last year it reached on peak it was 27 percent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t in sweden as well as it continued with same difference in next two years it was...
^^
Line 7, column 157, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'trends'?
Suggestion: trends
...ent respectively. There are fluctuating trend of japan population it was five percent...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that it continueslly decreased till 2000 3% but in last year it reached on peak i...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, well, whereas, while, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 881.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68617021277 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58080699301 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.1268564083 43.030603864 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.833333333 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 22.9334400587 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.23603664747 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158812052721 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761814622888 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639543409252 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109554932455 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590797172314 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.2329268293 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t in sweden as well as it continued with same difference in next two years it was...
^^
Line 7, column 157, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'trends'?
Suggestion: trends
...ent respectively. There are fluctuating trend of japan population it was five percent...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that it continueslly decreased till 2000 3% but in last year it reached on peak i...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, well, whereas, while, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 881.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68617021277 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58080699301 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.1268564083 43.030603864 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.833333333 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 22.9334400587 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.23603664747 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158812052721 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761814622888 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639543409252 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109554932455 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590797172314 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.2329268293 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.